Review of Sister B
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Review of Sister B
[Following is a volunteer review of "Sister B" by David Charles Hart.]
(I)Sister B by David Charles Hart(/I)
The book overall is interesting and is about his mother, Sister B , whose real name is Willie Mae Young.
It is about her life as a African American Women, her life journey and the problems she encounters through it.
The use of numbers and their placement throughout the book.
Many of his paragraphs are split up by the wrong use of numbers. He uses two different lots of numbers. One are for paragraphs and the other lots are for references to the information in that particular piece.
The numbers often tend to be inside a sentence, which he then splits into two or three bits, losing the whole of the sentence, and this makes it difficult to understand. He does this throughout the whole of the book.
On top of that the references for a particular piece is also in the middle of sentencing, so you land up with two lots of numbers, often in the same paragraph putting the whole lot a jumbled mess.
The numbers, especially for the paragraphs are often inconsistent and at times unnecessary. Where he has placed some of the number is followed by a title, but in many cases he put his name, or there are no title at all. This naming is inconsistent.
In several parts, where he cites from a outside source, that is within the text instead of being cited in the back of the book.
Use of local language.
At the beginning of the book, he tells you the story of a negro, who is being arrested for the murder of a white man. When the negro speaks, he uses his local language, which makes it difficult to understand.
David then does the same thing again when Sister B is talking to a work colleague. The paragraph of conversation which is almost impossible to understand. This is the beginning of the sentence "Well iz preddy nize out hea. Yuh'll like it." And this continues for about six sentences. Even Sister B complains in her head about her way of talking. For many people it will be very difficult to understand.
Use of unnecessary pictures.
Inside the book there are placed pictures, some of which l think are unnecessary. The main ones are two pictures of people who have been hung, one in a tree and the other on a bridge. The first one was a real shock, and did put me off to continue reading the book. He had already described the murder of the negro, but to actually come across the picture. Ouch. The second picture of a hanging did not seem relevant to the story.
There was also a piece of music, in Japanese, which maybe unnecessary. Ok if you can read music, not much good otherwise.
Swearing.and sexual scenes
There is no real swearing within the book. There is only one sex scene within the book, and this is very descriptive. (Scale of 2)
Use of outside information.
In certain areas of the book, David describes in great detail, people and places in line with the book, people of interest. The book covers the period of the second world war and the history of the USA.
Fine and relevant, but his use of numbers, in both paragraphs and content tend to be in the wrong places and is often either too long a paragraph, or contains irrelevant information. Such as the story of President Roosevelt and the Teddy bear, which was named after him, but only comes about because Sister B had given one of the children a teddy.
Spelling.
David has a habit of hyphenating any spellings he is not sure about. My favorite word is portmanteau, which is actually another way of describing a bag or case.
Ending of the book.
The ending of the book is scrappy. And personally l would put that chapter at the beginning, because it gives a better content to what the book is about.
The book is interesting, but does need tidying up, especially with the numbers as it spoils the reading of it.
(b)That is the main reason l have given it a middle score, for both parts is the use of numbers, which are often in the wrong place, missed out or unnecessary. The numbers split up the sentencing, making it difficult to follow and is not helped by those pictures l mentioned earlier, that really can put people off.
[The ratings are 2 out of 4. 3 out of 5(/b)]
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Sister B
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(I)Sister B by David Charles Hart(/I)
The book overall is interesting and is about his mother, Sister B , whose real name is Willie Mae Young.
It is about her life as a African American Women, her life journey and the problems she encounters through it.
The use of numbers and their placement throughout the book.
Many of his paragraphs are split up by the wrong use of numbers. He uses two different lots of numbers. One are for paragraphs and the other lots are for references to the information in that particular piece.
The numbers often tend to be inside a sentence, which he then splits into two or three bits, losing the whole of the sentence, and this makes it difficult to understand. He does this throughout the whole of the book.
On top of that the references for a particular piece is also in the middle of sentencing, so you land up with two lots of numbers, often in the same paragraph putting the whole lot a jumbled mess.
The numbers, especially for the paragraphs are often inconsistent and at times unnecessary. Where he has placed some of the number is followed by a title, but in many cases he put his name, or there are no title at all. This naming is inconsistent.
In several parts, where he cites from a outside source, that is within the text instead of being cited in the back of the book.
Use of local language.
At the beginning of the book, he tells you the story of a negro, who is being arrested for the murder of a white man. When the negro speaks, he uses his local language, which makes it difficult to understand.
David then does the same thing again when Sister B is talking to a work colleague. The paragraph of conversation which is almost impossible to understand. This is the beginning of the sentence "Well iz preddy nize out hea. Yuh'll like it." And this continues for about six sentences. Even Sister B complains in her head about her way of talking. For many people it will be very difficult to understand.
Use of unnecessary pictures.
Inside the book there are placed pictures, some of which l think are unnecessary. The main ones are two pictures of people who have been hung, one in a tree and the other on a bridge. The first one was a real shock, and did put me off to continue reading the book. He had already described the murder of the negro, but to actually come across the picture. Ouch. The second picture of a hanging did not seem relevant to the story.
There was also a piece of music, in Japanese, which maybe unnecessary. Ok if you can read music, not much good otherwise.
Swearing.and sexual scenes
There is no real swearing within the book. There is only one sex scene within the book, and this is very descriptive. (Scale of 2)
Use of outside information.
In certain areas of the book, David describes in great detail, people and places in line with the book, people of interest. The book covers the period of the second world war and the history of the USA.
Fine and relevant, but his use of numbers, in both paragraphs and content tend to be in the wrong places and is often either too long a paragraph, or contains irrelevant information. Such as the story of President Roosevelt and the Teddy bear, which was named after him, but only comes about because Sister B had given one of the children a teddy.
Spelling.
David has a habit of hyphenating any spellings he is not sure about. My favorite word is portmanteau, which is actually another way of describing a bag or case.
Ending of the book.
The ending of the book is scrappy. And personally l would put that chapter at the beginning, because it gives a better content to what the book is about.
The book is interesting, but does need tidying up, especially with the numbers as it spoils the reading of it.
(b)That is the main reason l have given it a middle score, for both parts is the use of numbers, which are often in the wrong place, missed out or unnecessary. The numbers split up the sentencing, making it difficult to follow and is not helped by those pictures l mentioned earlier, that really can put people off.
[The ratings are 2 out of 4. 3 out of 5(/b)]
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Sister B
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