Review by Jam-nk -- Breaking Sandcastles by Kirk Burris

[Jam-nk]

[Following is a volunteer review of "Breaking Sandcastles" by Kirk Burris.]

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4 out of 4 stars

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Breaking Sandcastles by Kirk Burris is a Realistic Fiction about a teacher and a student who were attracted to each other at first sight. It is quite interesting and embraces the reader to just sit and read to the end. Breaking Sandcastles is a narrative of events arranged in time sequence which capture its reader into the present, the past and then and give a brief insight of the future while the reader experience the showing and telling of how the relationship was formed, how it progresses and eventually ends.

Breaking Sandcastles captures the everyday struggles of relationships and the lengths some people would go to protect their affairs. This includes the odds against personal and societal beliefs, struggles of life and personality differences. Breaking Sandcastles is overall a great novel, well-structured with the elements flowing and is well sequenced which is a bit disappointing with the way the chapter started. It appeared a bit shaky, and I had to wonder if it was professionally edited, it was not evident where the story was going.

Having read through to the end I am now wondering if the first couple errors were intentional. There were instances where I thought the description was irrelevant and drawn out. The second paragraph, and last sentence I thought needed proper structure. The third paragraph last sentence did not really make sense she would already know she did nothing and would not need to look, there were too many things I could assume I really don’t think it was necessary. I would initially suggest that description is given in such a way that it can be visualize for example in describing Marion’s beauty.

I know she has green eyes from reading but how about describing her facial features, is her face round, how does her lips look. What makes her beautiful? When I think of the sun I think warm or even hot, if we are talking about chills then a descriptive paragraph would have helped in creating the atmosphere. A few errors in tenses “before passing into the kitchen as oppose to entering”. Conflicting sentences found in the piece for example “fragmenting into several pieces and split in two”. Use of pronoun his face instead of its face (page 7 last paragraph). Repetition “period, end of story” page 11.

Breaking Sandcastles captures the reader and allow for the reader to share in the experience. After a while reading it was easy to develop the pattern the story would take. A bit of the present then immersed into the past. "I rate this book 4 out of 4 stars." I think a lot of things that really did not make sense at first fell into place as you continue to read. I think this book would appeal to anyone who appreciates a good read. If you are looking for a story without suspense then this is not the book for you

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