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Review by foxyfox -- Twisted Threads by Kaylin McFarren
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3 out of 4 stars
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Hmm,twisted threads, the book shouldn't be tittled "twisted threads" the tittle does not really do justice to the drama,twist and suspense of this intriguing piece. The title should sound very dramatic like the book itself, something like "TWISTED". Personally,I think the book should be done on screen. The twist and turns of each chapter made me crave more likely to see it on the big screens.
There were a few errors here and there grammatically and in capitalizing some words, like in chapter 1;2nd paragraph;line 15 Threads (T should be in a small alphabet)., I also observed the use of Japanese words like "GEIKO" used at several occasions without the meaning of the word attached to it, I think the word GEIKO should have the meaning put in a () because it is not an English word and not Everyone know what it means.
The story line is very interesting, but i didn't really get it at the first instance.The part where Keiko was murdered. The writer should have written about the murder scene, writing about what really led to her death, how the murder took place,even if the culprit was not going to be revealed. Also the reason for the killing of KUROSAKI in the first chapter was unknown. Who he was should be talked about.
The writer should also have talked about Akira's early life. Who her parents was,how she became an assassin, how she became a member of a deadly organisation. You don't just tell us readers that Mitsui-san was her biological father at the last chapters of the book. I could not understand how this came to be. The writer made mention of Mitsui-san wanting Akira dead after learning she wanted to poison him, does this mean he knew that she was his daughter or did he only find out at a point. That didn't make any sense to me.
The scenes where Akira and Devon spent time and got to know themselves where very romantic but too long. I felt the drama scenes where passengers died would be elaborated. The deaths on the ship were very vague and outrightly meaningless. There should be a faceless person or maybe the murderer should be introduced during these occurrence. The person responsible for these deaths should be portrayed as a psychotic killer, as the description of the death scene be known to readers.
I Was hoping to read a detailed confession from Sara, with goose bumps on my body, but all that skipped. Also the watcher, it was finally revealed that she was a woman, who wanted to be addressed as Allison Lyons, who is she ? Paul Lyons ex-wife. My goodness it's truly twisted.
I think the writer should tell us who the murderer on the ship was, was it Sara, Yuki-san, Micheal... ? Or were they all murderers on board the ship? The chapter where Devon was abducted was not so clear. How was he moved from the basement of the ship to the presidential suite without Yuki-san and Cujo been seen by anyone?
Overall, the story line was intriguing, with suspense,romance,drama and a right amount of erotic scenes. With a little correction in spellings and grammar, also details to action scenes and occurrences. This book I would say is a Thriller. I rate this book 3 out of 4
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3 out of 4 stars
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Hmm,twisted threads, the book shouldn't be tittled "twisted threads" the tittle does not really do justice to the drama,twist and suspense of this intriguing piece. The title should sound very dramatic like the book itself, something like "TWISTED". Personally,I think the book should be done on screen. The twist and turns of each chapter made me crave more likely to see it on the big screens.
There were a few errors here and there grammatically and in capitalizing some words, like in chapter 1;2nd paragraph;line 15 Threads (T should be in a small alphabet)., I also observed the use of Japanese words like "GEIKO" used at several occasions without the meaning of the word attached to it, I think the word GEIKO should have the meaning put in a () because it is not an English word and not Everyone know what it means.
The story line is very interesting, but i didn't really get it at the first instance.The part where Keiko was murdered. The writer should have written about the murder scene, writing about what really led to her death, how the murder took place,even if the culprit was not going to be revealed. Also the reason for the killing of KUROSAKI in the first chapter was unknown. Who he was should be talked about.
The writer should also have talked about Akira's early life. Who her parents was,how she became an assassin, how she became a member of a deadly organisation. You don't just tell us readers that Mitsui-san was her biological father at the last chapters of the book. I could not understand how this came to be. The writer made mention of Mitsui-san wanting Akira dead after learning she wanted to poison him, does this mean he knew that she was his daughter or did he only find out at a point. That didn't make any sense to me.
The scenes where Akira and Devon spent time and got to know themselves where very romantic but too long. I felt the drama scenes where passengers died would be elaborated. The deaths on the ship were very vague and outrightly meaningless. There should be a faceless person or maybe the murderer should be introduced during these occurrence. The person responsible for these deaths should be portrayed as a psychotic killer, as the description of the death scene be known to readers.
I Was hoping to read a detailed confession from Sara, with goose bumps on my body, but all that skipped. Also the watcher, it was finally revealed that she was a woman, who wanted to be addressed as Allison Lyons, who is she ? Paul Lyons ex-wife. My goodness it's truly twisted.
I think the writer should tell us who the murderer on the ship was, was it Sara, Yuki-san, Micheal... ? Or were they all murderers on board the ship? The chapter where Devon was abducted was not so clear. How was he moved from the basement of the ship to the presidential suite without Yuki-san and Cujo been seen by anyone?
Overall, the story line was intriguing, with suspense,romance,drama and a right amount of erotic scenes. With a little correction in spellings and grammar, also details to action scenes and occurrences. This book I would say is a Thriller. I rate this book 3 out of 4
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