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Review by Summer_Moon -- Advent Of Silver
[Following is a volunteer review of "Advent Of Silver" by Atilla K. Zengin.]
1 out of 4 stars
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Advent of Silver by Atilla K. Zengin, is a science fiction and fantasy story. We follow Jericho, the main character, through part of his life. We watch Jericho as he grows from a young boy into a more mature young adult. The world he lives in is also rather peculiar, because magic can be used and there are no weapons (this is ensured by those who came from beyond the Earth and made it so weapons cannot be used). Since there is magic in this world, there are mages who can control the magic. Jericho is a mage. At first, Jericho does not seem able to use much, if any, of this magic, but we watch him learn to harness it to great extent as the story goes on.
Jericho’s father, Baal, is evil and through an interaction at the beginning of the story, drops Jericho out of a skyscraper window. Jericho’s mother leaps out the window after him and saves Jericho by using a crystal. The crystal only works for one person though and Jericho’s mother makes him use it. As a result, Jericho’s mother dies saving him. Jericho is determined to kill Baal for his mother’s death, but his father is also a mage and a very strong one. Jericho must learn and train his magic skills in order to defeat Baal. Along Jericho’s path to kill Baal, we find him interacting with some of those around him. Most importantly Dantanian, a long-lost older brother that Jericho never knew about, and Liatha Nespirk, who is the warden at the jail where Jericho is incarcerated when the book starts. Both Dantanian and Liatha play major roles throughout the story. Make sure to pay special attention to Dantanian.
Overall, the story here is simple. Jericho is trying to revenge his mother’s death but does not yet have the power to do so. So, Jericho must enhance his power to be strong enough to face Baal. At the same time, Baal is trying to take over the world and Jericho must find a way to stop him. The interesting part is how Zengin twists the story, which makes it unique. Especially in the last quarter of the book everything starts changing dramatically and it almost feels like it becomes a different book entirely.
With the book feeling different at spots, I believe Zengin may have started the story at multiple times. Some shifts are particularly jarring. A reader may have trouble keeping up with what happens. The shifts seem to be caused by stitching the separately written sections together to produce the final story. The other reason I believe this to be the case is because I found several short paragraphs that did not fit with the storytelling, but rather seemed to be notes the author left for himself to know what is happening in the story.
The whole book seemed more akin to a rough draft rather than a final product. I am not even sure it was read by the author after he completed the writing. There are many mistakes and typos throughout, and they are very easy to find. Zengin also has odd phrasings and word usage, many times using the wrong version of a word too (for example, complement rather than compliment). A simple read through would have done this book wonders.
The mistakes make this book a very difficult read and constantly interrupt the reader’s flow. But what makes it worse is the very odd word choices. For instance, “Jericho’s eyebrows stooped” is part of a line in the story. How exactly do eyebrows stoop? I kept trying to figure out how to get my eyebrows to lean over, but only managed to make weird faces. Stooped is not the right word to be used in that sentence, and I am still not sure what Zengin was trying to say.
The story line is okay, and it has some promise since there are twists that make it unique. The problem is the writing. Unfortunately, due to the poor writing I rate the book 1 out of 4 stars. I believe that Zengin does have a decent story line to work with, but this is far from a completed and finished story. This should have stayed as a rough draft and an editor would have helped work the kinks out.
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1 out of 4 stars
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Advent of Silver by Atilla K. Zengin, is a science fiction and fantasy story. We follow Jericho, the main character, through part of his life. We watch Jericho as he grows from a young boy into a more mature young adult. The world he lives in is also rather peculiar, because magic can be used and there are no weapons (this is ensured by those who came from beyond the Earth and made it so weapons cannot be used). Since there is magic in this world, there are mages who can control the magic. Jericho is a mage. At first, Jericho does not seem able to use much, if any, of this magic, but we watch him learn to harness it to great extent as the story goes on.
Jericho’s father, Baal, is evil and through an interaction at the beginning of the story, drops Jericho out of a skyscraper window. Jericho’s mother leaps out the window after him and saves Jericho by using a crystal. The crystal only works for one person though and Jericho’s mother makes him use it. As a result, Jericho’s mother dies saving him. Jericho is determined to kill Baal for his mother’s death, but his father is also a mage and a very strong one. Jericho must learn and train his magic skills in order to defeat Baal. Along Jericho’s path to kill Baal, we find him interacting with some of those around him. Most importantly Dantanian, a long-lost older brother that Jericho never knew about, and Liatha Nespirk, who is the warden at the jail where Jericho is incarcerated when the book starts. Both Dantanian and Liatha play major roles throughout the story. Make sure to pay special attention to Dantanian.
Overall, the story here is simple. Jericho is trying to revenge his mother’s death but does not yet have the power to do so. So, Jericho must enhance his power to be strong enough to face Baal. At the same time, Baal is trying to take over the world and Jericho must find a way to stop him. The interesting part is how Zengin twists the story, which makes it unique. Especially in the last quarter of the book everything starts changing dramatically and it almost feels like it becomes a different book entirely.
With the book feeling different at spots, I believe Zengin may have started the story at multiple times. Some shifts are particularly jarring. A reader may have trouble keeping up with what happens. The shifts seem to be caused by stitching the separately written sections together to produce the final story. The other reason I believe this to be the case is because I found several short paragraphs that did not fit with the storytelling, but rather seemed to be notes the author left for himself to know what is happening in the story.
The whole book seemed more akin to a rough draft rather than a final product. I am not even sure it was read by the author after he completed the writing. There are many mistakes and typos throughout, and they are very easy to find. Zengin also has odd phrasings and word usage, many times using the wrong version of a word too (for example, complement rather than compliment). A simple read through would have done this book wonders.
The mistakes make this book a very difficult read and constantly interrupt the reader’s flow. But what makes it worse is the very odd word choices. For instance, “Jericho’s eyebrows stooped” is part of a line in the story. How exactly do eyebrows stoop? I kept trying to figure out how to get my eyebrows to lean over, but only managed to make weird faces. Stooped is not the right word to be used in that sentence, and I am still not sure what Zengin was trying to say.
The story line is okay, and it has some promise since there are twists that make it unique. The problem is the writing. Unfortunately, due to the poor writing I rate the book 1 out of 4 stars. I believe that Zengin does have a decent story line to work with, but this is far from a completed and finished story. This should have stayed as a rough draft and an editor would have helped work the kinks out.
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