Dream On My Pillow

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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
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Dream On My Pillow

Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 07 Jan 2019, 05:23

Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se

How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;

How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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Post by Sulemana Awal » 07 Jan 2019, 09:21

Amazing

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 08 Jan 2019, 01:31

Sulemana Awal wrote:
07 Jan 2019, 09:21
Amazing
Thanks.
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Post by Backpackroses » 08 Jan 2019, 13:10

Oh I like this!

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 08 Jan 2019, 18:20

Backpackroses wrote:
08 Jan 2019, 13:10
Oh I like this!
Thanks for commenting. This is just a simple rhyming exercise done years ago.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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Post by Chrystal Oaks » 09 Jan 2019, 17:14

Peaceful.

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 10 Jan 2019, 08:14

chroaks1 wrote:
09 Jan 2019, 17:14
Peaceful.
Thanks for the feedback.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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Post by Louanne Piccolo » 11 Jan 2019, 11:27

That is beautiful! I'm not really a poetry person, but I can enjoy poems like yours which are simple but powerful. Well done!
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 14 Jan 2019, 09:08

Louanne Piccolo wrote:
11 Jan 2019, 11:27
That is beautiful! I'm not really a poetry person, but I can enjoy poems like yours which are simple but powerful. Well done!
Thanks for visiting. I am for the simple things, I detest complications. lol
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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