Lost love

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Prissy16
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Lost love

Post by Prissy16 » 19 Apr 2018, 11:46

I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me .. :?:
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR

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Post by k solo » 19 Apr 2018, 23:58

I can totally relate
this is exactly the emotions and ups and downs that I go through every day...

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Post by palilogy » 11 Jun 2018, 13:02

I feel like you have a lot of material behind this poem. You have strong emotions and a tone that will be very successful in a poem. Consider what you really want to say.

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Post by Sobia Afsar8080 » 21 Jun 2018, 00:43

The poem represents an emotional and nostalgic scenario. It beautifully describes the past and present emotional state. Coordination between the lines could be reconsidered.

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Post by TaaraLynn » 11 Jul 2018, 15:18

I love this! I related to the first three lines so quickly. Nostalgia always gets me. But the past is gone, however it's always there casting shadows.
"Maybe the two different worlds we lived in weren't so different. We saw the same sunset." - Ponyboy Curtis, The Outsiders

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Post by Kaitlennnn00 » 11 Jul 2018, 20:20

This is beautifully written.

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