A Silly Fairytale

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A Silly Fairytale

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A Silly Fairytale

Once there was a lady
who schemed for a prince to marry.

She arranged that her man
be turned to a frog for her plan.

Kissed frog turns Prince, voila!
That was the magic formula.

But the Wizard said: 'No! '
'There is one thing you should know.'

If frog is a cursed prince
As Fairy Tales say ever since.

The common men and others
only turn to salamanders.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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This girl is acting actually kinda selfish in this because of the fact that she wants to turn him into a frog so she can marry him. She would probably still marry him afterward because why go through ALL that trouble for nothing. Maybe even if everyone was a salamanser
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Superpanda13 wrote: 03 Feb 2018, 01:14 This girl is acting actually kinda selfish in this because of the fact that she wants to turn him into a frog so she can marry him. She would probably still marry him afterward because why go through ALL that trouble for nothing. Maybe even if everyone was a salamander
Thanks for your reply. You said the girl is selfish? Well, in turning the man into a frog and then kissing the frog, she will have turned the man into a prince. Isn't that an improvement on the man's status?
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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It is infact not giving him a hand out but a hand up, as you said, his status grows exponentially because of the work,the patients, and the love she had for that man (Soon To be instant made king).
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Luckybug101 wrote: 04 Feb 2018, 02:21 It is infact not giving him a hand out but a hand up, as you said, his status grows exponentially because of the work,the patients, and the love she had for that man (Soon To be instant made king).
Yes, the man will be made a king and the woman will be queen. So, she is hitting two birds with one stone.
Thanks for your reply.
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...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Love it, Revyrex, and thinking it would also make a splendid animation!
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Lincolnshirelass wrote: 05 Feb 2018, 04:50 Love it, Revyrex, and thinking it would also make a splendid animation!
Haha Lassie, this is good as children's humorous cartoon piece. It carries a lesson. lol.
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...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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I like this twist on fairy tales. I always enjoy fairy tale-inspired poetry.
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KatSims92 wrote: 29 Jun 2018, 09:20 I like this twist on fairy tales. I always enjoy fairy tale-inspired poetry.
Thanks for your comment. That inspires me.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
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Revyrex, what a splendid poem
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akinwale1841 wrote: 12 Jul 2018, 16:50 Revyrex, what a splendid poem
Thanks akinwale1841
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very nice poem
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Raniaadderly wrote: 16 Jul 2018, 00:56 very nice poem
Thank you. Very much needed that nice comment. It's music to my ears.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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