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Post by Brandi Noelle » 26 Oct 2017, 15:08

"Red stilettos. It was the red stilettos he remembered most clearly. It was funny how the most important moments of his life could be clouded in such shadows. But then, he recalled that he had thought of her as the Shadow Woman, and it actually wasn’t that funny at all."

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Post by yellosteel » 31 Oct 2017, 13:55

Brandi Noelle wrote:"Red stilettos. It was the red stilettos he remembered most clearly. It was funny how the most important moments of his life could be clouded in such shadows. But then, he recalled that he had thought of her as the Shadow Woman, and it actually wasn’t that funny at all."
.....great!

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Post by Brandi Noelle » 01 Nov 2017, 18:30

yellosteel wrote:
Brandi Noelle wrote:"Red stilettos. It was the red stilettos he remembered most clearly. It was funny how the most important moments of his life could be clouded in such shadows. But then, he recalled that he had thought of her as the Shadow Woman, and it actually wasn’t that funny at all."
.....great!
Thank you, yellosteel! I appreciate the feedback.

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Post by Lincolnshirelass » 02 Nov 2017, 06:01

When Hannah awoke, the sound of early birdsong and the sparkling sunlight streaming through the window told her it was going to be a glorious summer's day. It took a split second for it to dawn on her. When she had fallen asleep, the house had been snowbound. And it had not been this house.
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Post by MorningSky » 07 Jan 2018, 14:00

A cold and dreary morning was what greeted Haley the moment she stepped foot on her front yard. With an umbrella on one hand and her small bag on her back, she prayed to whoever was listening that her biology teacher wasn't present today.

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Post by Serena_Charlotte » 11 Jan 2018, 15:46

Most people are driven to show the world that they are unquestionably happy. This delusion is what keeps people sane in our world. But without this seemingly flawed philosophy of delusion we would be subject to the unrelenting fear which was offered by the world we lived in.
Where is the line between insanity and creativity?
Is the reality of the world different from how we perceive and experience it in our minds? Does physical reality exist apart from the human mind?

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Post by Jessie118 » 11 Jan 2018, 22:52

kbeckmeyer wrote:
30 May 2016, 22:47
If you're happy and you know it, don't try to sell your grandmother's underpants on ebay. It doesn't matter how famous she is, or how badly you need an extra paycheck. Don't.
haha, I love this one!

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Post by Helen_Combe » 29 Mar 2018, 15:56

Here’s the opening line to a story I’m currently writing.

‘Agent When was just settling down to her knitting when a rock came flying through the window and nutted her smartly.’
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Post by DesireeRose » 03 Apr 2018, 16:09

All was calm. The wind rippled through the water, which looked soft and alluring. The woman sighed in her sleep, and the man next to her played with her hand. Everything was good. No one would find them here. The man wondered if it had been smart, to bring this woman with him and run away. What other choice did he have? The woman would have been heartbroken if he had left her. He had made the right decision. He looked at her hands. They were so small, so delicate, so fragile...he hoped he could protect her. Suddenly, a loud growl could be heard. The water became jagged and dangerous as a sea monster burst out from the water and swallowed the small boat in one large gulp.


Sorry, it got a little long...

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Post by Helen_Combe » 03 Apr 2018, 16:12

DesireeRose wrote:
03 Apr 2018, 16:09
All was calm. The wind rippled through the water, which looked soft and alluring. The woman sighed in her sleep, and the man next to her played with her hand. Everything was good. No one would find them here. The man wondered if it had been smart, to bring this woman with him and run away. What other choice did he have? The woman would have been heartbroken if he had left her. He had made the right decision. He looked at her hands. They were so small, so delicate, so fragile...he hoped he could protect her. Suddenly, a loud growl could be heard. The water became jagged and dangerous as a sea monster burst out from the water and swallowed the small boat in one large gulp.


Sorry, it got a little long...
I think that’s an entire flash fiction rather than an opening line. I like the twist at the end 😄
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Post by Sphenge » 07 Apr 2018, 16:34

There I was once again, sitting at a bar stool alone, watching my girl squad dancing the night away with their male companions. As for me, well the only thing I hoped for was that one of the two men who were seated next to me could at least say "Hi." I wondered when will my days of always being a candle holder for my friends end.

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Post by Sushan » 06 Jun 2018, 14:25

Darkness was creeping from everywhere, taking everything into its tight grip.
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Post by Morgan Jones » 11 Jun 2018, 21:32

With blood on his face and fear in his eyes, Jimin taught himself to never drop a tear again for the misfortunate.
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