gush!! i read this nd i was totally put off. This book needs more work if people will get to enjoy it. A good book is more than just the storyline, it also includes how the story is presented.Vscholz wrote: ↑02 Dec 2018, 22:24It really is a shame that there are so many errors, and in the beginning, too. I have been excited about this book since I saw it was named December BotM, but I am a stickler for decent grammar.imjaneturner wrote: ↑01 Dec 2018, 15:38I completely agree with regard to the grammatical errors. I am three pages in and have recorded 7 instances of grammatical errors. Not only are there many basic grammar errors (like missing commas), but there are also weird sentence structures. I want to include an example that really threw me off:Ruba Abu Ali wrote: ↑01 Dec 2018, 06:07 I liked the well-built characters in this book. On the downside, I was a bit put off by the grammatical errors. A round of judicious editing is needed. Additionally, at certain points, there were extensive details that I felt were not of major importance to the storyline.
Would I recommend it to others? I would, if you can overlook the editorial issues, and resist the urge to skim through the pages because of the too many details.
"Debbie drove to Z Pita with her Dad following. Because she was taking her car onto the ferry, he needed to take his own vehicle which was diamond white Corvette, he called it his favorite toy. They walked into Z Pita and sat for lunch at table four. It was ironic because the two men sitting at table three, Detectives Powers and Johnson, were going to be a part of her for the remainder of her life. No matter how long or short it would be, it was these two that would have an important role in her destiny and yet now, this second, they were just two men sitting close to her space while not even giving them a moment's thought."
Torbert, R.J.. The Face of Fear: A Powers and Johnson Novel (p. 3). Two Harbors Press. Kindle Edition.
Everything about this paragraph needs to be redone. This book is in desperate need of editing.
Thank you for this example (and the citation!!!). I'll have to consider more before I decide whether or not to take the plunge.
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I just read this conversation. Even if someone was to convince me that the story isn't as scary as I think, I would need the book to be re-edited before I could dedicate time to it.topdan30 wrote: ↑08 Dec 2018, 06:08gush!! i read this nd i was totally put off. This book needs more work if people will get to enjoy it. A good book is more than just the storyline, it also includes how the story is presented.Vscholz wrote: ↑02 Dec 2018, 22:24It really is a shame that there are so many errors, and in the beginning, too. I have been excited about this book since I saw it was named December BotM, but I am a stickler for decent grammar.imjaneturner wrote: ↑01 Dec 2018, 15:38
I completely agree with regard to the grammatical errors. I am three pages in and have recorded 7 instances of grammatical errors. Not only are there many basic grammar errors (like missing commas), but there are also weird sentence structures. I want to include an example that really threw me off:
"Debbie drove to Z Pita with her Dad following. Because she was taking her car onto the ferry, he needed to take his own vehicle which was diamond white Corvette, he called it his favorite toy. They walked into Z Pita and sat for lunch at table four. It was ironic because the two men sitting at table three, Detectives Powers and Johnson, were going to be a part of her for the remainder of her life. No matter how long or short it would be, it was these two that would have an important role in her destiny and yet now, this second, they were just two men sitting close to her space while not even giving them a moment's thought."
Torbert, R.J.. The Face of Fear: A Powers and Johnson Novel (p. 3). Two Harbors Press. Kindle Edition.
Everything about this paragraph needs to be redone. This book is in desperate need of editing.
Thank you for this example (and the citation!!!). I'll have to consider more before I decide whether or not to take the plunge.
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I'm looking at this and thinking too many irrelevant details. Even if I cared what table numbers they sat at, there is no concept of where in the place those tables are to give the detail any meaning.Georgia Lyonhyde wrote: ↑11 Dec 2018, 20:07I just read this conversation. Even if someone was to convince me that the story isn't as scary as I think, I would need the book to be re-edited before I could dedicate time to it.topdan30 wrote: ↑08 Dec 2018, 06:08gush!! i read this nd i was totally put off. This book needs more work if people will get to enjoy it. A good book is more than just the storyline, it also includes how the story is presented.Vscholz wrote: ↑02 Dec 2018, 22:24
It really is a shame that there are so many errors, and in the beginning, too. I have been excited about this book since I saw it was named December BotM, but I am a stickler for decent grammar.
Thank you for this example (and the citation!!!). I'll have to consider more before I decide whether or not to take the plunge.
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This is putting me off this book. I read the sample in total and thought it had a great plot and will make one fascinating crime thriller. However, I'm disappointed at the multiple errors noted in the book..I liked the well-built characters in this book. On the downside, I was a bit put off by the grammatical errors. A round of judicious editing is needed. Additionally, at certain points, there were extensive details that I felt were not of major importance to the storyline.
Would I recommend it to others? I would if you can overlook the editorial issues, and resist the urge to skim through the pages because of the too many details.
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I noticed the errors as well and they were off-putting for me and its really sad because the story is really entertaining.Ruba Abu Ali wrote: ↑01 Dec 2018, 06:07 I liked the well-built characters in this book. On the downside, I was a bit put off by the grammatical errors. A round of judicious editing is needed. Additionally, at certain points, there were extensive details that I felt were not of major importance to the storyline.
Would I recommend it to others? I would, if you can overlook the editorial issues, and resist the urge to skim through the pages because of the too many details.
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