One of my poems

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Re: One of my poems

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This is the first poem I ever wrote while in college. Please feel free to give you're honest feedback. Thank you

Homosexuality
Not an unknown concept
Present in every society
But not that all accept

Getting attracted to the same gender
It isn't something planned
Love is an emotion so tender
Not to be restricted or banned

We shouldn't judge each other
Let each to his own
Having a true partner is much better
Than being all alone
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very creative poem. I like how it makes you wonder what you are talking about then at the end i would of never guessed you were talking bout your hand really really like it.
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I love the twist at the end. Very clever xxx
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Rise Above the Flames

I rise above the flames
And I think I'm there again
That place I used to know
The place where I could grow.

It felt so lost to me then
But I knew it wasn't the end
I pushed and fought my way through
And I'm back on the side i always knew.

A place of love
A place of kindness
A place abandoned of closed mindness.

I'm here to stay
I'll never again stray
and allow the darkness to find me.
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very good work, I love it! share more soon :)
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Post by laraiza82 »

Loving your poem!! Awesome twist at the end. Great JOB!!
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Post by britt0124 »

Love the suspense and thinking it makes you do! Such an inspirational poem. Not only does it make you think but it is also beautifully written great job!
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Post by Enthuseme33 »

Very awsome and unique i love it
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Post by Harish Kumar Mahto »

Yeah Nice Variations of Words.you have elaborate the whole story in simple.
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I think that is sort of a good poem. It is an aesthetic idea about completely a normal and a usual thing. I think a poet should be such a person who sees the value of ordinary things in a different way, other than the ordinary people see it
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You are my hand
Is a very interesting line.
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Thank you for sharing this with us, it's so cute.
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Post by Brandon Powell »

yes I agree with Kevin you are a great writer i like how the words flow and you refer to someone as your hand. it was a great poem.
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Post by Norg12345 »

This is such a good poem 👌🏽
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Creative of you.. ☺
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