Valentine

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Muanaajay
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Valentine

Post by Muanaajay » 27 Jun 2018, 09:04

It was late valentine night i was hoping to have my valentine best but a girl came to me and ask :roll2: if u don't mine can you drop me to the bar its emergency , i clear my throat and said why she replied and said im f**k up with my boyfriend and i just want something to drink.
I said okay because i was exhauted too i need to relax but my mind say she just trying to using you like a doosebag , but my heart say yes do it
Then she sat inside my car and the journey started ,i asked her name first she replied and said isha and yours i say vishav
I played a song who's loving you and she started singing this song loudly ,she was one of her kind ,i was thinking it was destiny to met such a nyc person

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Skinnylegends
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Post by Skinnylegends » 22 Jul 2018, 17:06

Your use of commas makes me cringe, capitalize the letter I, work on your punctuation and spelling. Other than that, what you wrote was okay I guess.

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