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Lost love
Posted: 19 Apr 2018, 11:46
by Prissy16
I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me ..
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR
Re: Lost love
Posted: 19 Apr 2018, 23:58
by k solo
I can totally relate
this is exactly the emotions and ups and downs that I go through every day...
Re: Lost love
Posted: 11 Jun 2018, 13:02
by palilogy
I feel like you have a lot of material behind this poem. You have strong emotions and a tone that will be very successful in a poem. Consider what you really want to say.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 21 Jun 2018, 00:43
by Sobia Afsar8080
The poem represents an emotional and nostalgic scenario. It beautifully describes the past and present emotional state. Coordination between the lines could be reconsidered.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 11 Jul 2018, 15:18
by TaaraLynn
I love this! I related to the first three lines so quickly. Nostalgia always gets me. But the past is gone, however it's always there casting shadows.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 11 Jul 2018, 20:20
by Kaitlennnn00
This is beautifully written.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 11 Aug 2018, 05:31
by Azz
This poem clearly depicts the emotional trauma that sets in once a love affair has gone sour & finally gravitates to irreparable situation! i like the rhythm used and the choice of words.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 13 Aug 2018, 23:06
by Jennieimanil
This poem I can relate too. Its what I'm going through right now. Everything is fine and all of a sudden i am totally lost. I feel hurt inside in a way that its hard to explain.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 23 Aug 2018, 09:55
by SMwathi
short and precise. I like it.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 03 Oct 2018, 14:32
by Ab001
U sound like someone battling depression.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 10 Oct 2018, 17:15
by juliamenez
This is beautifully written but has such a sad message.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 01 Nov 2018, 16:44
by Paulemmy12
The poem represents an emotional and nostalgic scenario. It beautifully describes the past and present emotional state. Coordination between the lines could be reconsidered.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 02 Nov 2018, 10:03
by Maryamsheikh
Prissy16 wrote: ↑19 Apr 2018, 11:46
I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me ..
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR
What a beautiful poem how the poet is saying i'm just now ash and i don't remember any memories and how beautifully he is saying that maybe i'm still not the same may be i'm like dead man
Re: Lost love
Posted: 09 Nov 2018, 00:44
by TEE57
I like this poem because it leaves me wanting to know more. it has me thinking that it is not about the poet losing a lost love as in a lover but losing the love for his/her self so much that he/she feels as though he/she is dying.
Re: Lost love
Posted: 09 Nov 2018, 04:35
by Cassandra Zela
Prissy16 wrote: ↑19 Apr 2018, 11:46
I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me ..
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR
So much emotion... I can actually picture myself in the poem ... expressing love but not getting the same love back