Lost love

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Prissy16
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Lost love

Post by Prissy16 » 19 Apr 2018, 11:46

I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me .. :?:
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR

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Post by k solo » 19 Apr 2018, 23:58

I can totally relate
this is exactly the emotions and ups and downs that I go through every day...

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Post by palilogy » 11 Jun 2018, 13:02

I feel like you have a lot of material behind this poem. You have strong emotions and a tone that will be very successful in a poem. Consider what you really want to say.

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Post by Sobia Afsar8080 » 21 Jun 2018, 00:43

The poem represents an emotional and nostalgic scenario. It beautifully describes the past and present emotional state. Coordination between the lines could be reconsidered.

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Post by TaaraLynn » 11 Jul 2018, 15:18

I love this! I related to the first three lines so quickly. Nostalgia always gets me. But the past is gone, however it's always there casting shadows.
"Maybe the two different worlds we lived in weren't so different. We saw the same sunset." - Ponyboy Curtis, The Outsiders

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Post by Kaitlennnn00 » 11 Jul 2018, 20:20

This is beautifully written.

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Post by Azz » 11 Aug 2018, 05:31

This poem clearly depicts the emotional trauma that sets in once a love affair has gone sour & finally gravitates to irreparable situation! i like the rhythm used and the choice of words.

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Post by Jennieimanil » 13 Aug 2018, 23:06

This poem I can relate too. Its what I'm going through right now. Everything is fine and all of a sudden i am totally lost. I feel hurt inside in a way that its hard to explain.

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Post by SMwathi » 23 Aug 2018, 09:55

short and precise. I like it.

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Post by Ab001 » 03 Oct 2018, 14:32

U sound like someone battling depression.

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Post by juliamenez » 10 Oct 2018, 17:15

This is beautifully written but has such a sad message.

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Post by Paulemmy12 » 01 Nov 2018, 16:44

The poem represents an emotional and nostalgic scenario. It beautifully describes the past and present emotional state. Coordination between the lines could be reconsidered.

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Post by Maryamsheikh » 02 Nov 2018, 10:03

Prissy16 wrote:
19 Apr 2018, 11:46
I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me .. :?:
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR
What a beautiful poem how the poet is saying i'm just now ash and i don't remember any memories and how beautifully he is saying that maybe i'm still not the same may be i'm like dead man

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Post by TEE57 » 09 Nov 2018, 00:44

I like this poem because it leaves me wanting to know more. it has me thinking that it is not about the poet losing a lost love as in a lover but losing the love for his/her self so much that he/she feels as though he/she is dying.

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Post by Cassandra Zela » 09 Nov 2018, 04:35

Prissy16 wrote:
19 Apr 2018, 11:46
I wonder what my eyes keep searching for in me .. :?:
There's no fire and no smoke,
All I'm left with is ashes from the past,
Neither does that love nor it's memories remain,
There was such a burning fire in my heart
But nothing is there nothing is remained,
Whose picture I see in my eyes always,
I'm not the same loving person but it's quite like a grave....
PR
So much emotion... I can actually picture myself in the poem ... expressing love but not getting the same love back

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