3 poems for the clinically depressed

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Damo Obrigado
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3 poems for the clinically depressed

Post by Damo Obrigado » 04 Mar 2017, 23:39

I'm new here and I didn't know if this would be okay to post, but let me know if you would like me to not post poetry here anymore, and I promise I won't do it again.

I love you
also love loves you
you've always loved love
doesn't love feel good
also love doesn't exist
love is like magic
it doesn't exist
love is also like you
because I've never met you
but you're magic too
hypothetical you

~
my eyes open
brain catching up
blink, blink, blink
what's different today?

same bedroom, same bed sheets
limbs and organs intact
no foul smells, or wetness
then a thought, am I dead?

a deep breath
yes it seems I've died
this is what dead feels like
so should I just lie here or go back to sleep?

~
Stock photo woman

There is a stock photo woman
real still, looking over her right shoulder,
crouched and glaring
caught on camera mid-squat;
as if she found an open man hole
and just jumped in,
clothes suggesting family wealth,
possibly an inheritance,
she makes filthy sewers feel luxurious:
perched mouth, hair cascading,
down to earth, yet sophisticated
but oh lord, says, the stock photo woman:
they chase me around
force me to dress
nobody asks what's in my soul
underneath these clothes and makeup
her deepest concealed desire
a small bite of
pie


cheers,

damo

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Post by Christina O Phillips » 28 Mar 2017, 09:33

Hi,
Are you posting these because you just wanted to share or because you want constructive feedback?

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Post by wroteyou » 29 Mar 2017, 03:28

yeah i'm interested to know why you decided to post

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Post by Damo Obrigado » 30 Mar 2017, 22:28

I write poems sometimes. Just thought I would share it with you guys, because I'm new here.

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Post by Katherine Smith » 06 Apr 2017, 13:02

I like your poetry. I am also new here and I have only been on for less than a week. I think you should continue your poetry. It has a lot of description and feeling. :D

Welcome to the group by the way. :tiphat:
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Post by faith millicent » 20 May 2017, 01:18

This is great. Am also new in this forum, i'd like toblearn more

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Post by NICA ALBERT RANCES » 20 May 2017, 01:37

I just find it boring? Im sorry but practice harder. And put some interesting and catching title

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Post by Subnavigation54 » 20 May 2017, 08:34

I agree with above but If it helps with your depression, just keep on writing

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Post by monmolt » 01 Jun 2017, 10:35

Great poems i really like them!

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Post by lindsycummins » 02 Jun 2017, 13:51

I think they're beautiful! When I was a teenager, poetry also helped me get out of sadness. Not sure if I was depressed, but hopefully writing poetry would help you with that.

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Post by Sweetp120 » 08 Dec 2018, 04:23

best advice I can give, this was given to me from a mentor who was a well known published author (although he would never give me his full name no matter how hard I tried :/ ) He said "not everyone will like your work, not everyone will understand it, but as long as you are happy with your work that is what matters. Your words aren't meant for everyone you come across or that comes across you, but those that need it will understand, and that's what matters too." He also said, "A finished copy of a poem isn't a poem until you read it out loud."

On that note I didn't understand some of it but it wasn't bad for a start. I can tell as one with depression as well that writing helps relieve the weight on my shoulders and if it does the same for you don't stop.

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Post by becsimpson » 10 Dec 2018, 08:14

If writing helps get out your thoughts and feelings, and it helps with your depression, then keep doing it. It doesn’t matter what anyone else thinks; writing can be therapy for some people. I know it helps me a lot too. I just pour everything out onto the page and when I’m done I feel a bit better. Keep at it, nice work

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Post by Jerridolphin » 10 Jan 2019, 17:18

I really enjoyed your poem

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Post by OmgItsMaya » 11 Jan 2019, 20:01

I agree with previous statements saying that because this creative outlet works for making you feel better then continue using it :). I really enjoy the detail that you use and the concepts that you explore.

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