Commas. Yes, no, maybe so?

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Commas. Yes, no, maybe so?

Post by Amanda Deck » 25 Aug 2018, 12:11

What punctuation should be in this sentence?
I was shocked to discover how old some of my favorite authors that still write are now.
Or should I just say
"I was shocked to discover how old some of my favorite authors are that still write"?

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Post by Amanda Deck » 25 Aug 2018, 12:14

These things used to come so easily and naturally to me. :?

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Post by Nditah » 28 Aug 2018, 10:51

I prefer this: "I was shocked to discover how old some of my favorite authors are that still write"?
I will return to read om others' comments

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Post by kaymontacell » 28 Aug 2018, 18:04

"I was shocked to discover how old some of my favorite authors that still write are now." is probably the better sentence between the two, but it's still awkwardly phrased. I'd prefer something like this:

"I was shocked to discover how old some of my favorite actively writing authors are now."

or somehow break it up like this:

"I was shocked to discover how old some of my favorite authors are now, and I'm surprised that they're still writing at their ages."
"No way but forward!"

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Post by Amanda Deck » 30 Aug 2018, 19:15

I kept going back and forth with it, first preferring one, then the other. Nditah, that's the one I usually prefer.
But kaymontacell, I think yours is the best idea. Rephrase it entirely. "Actively writing authors" is complimentary and makes my point, so thank you.

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