Missing words, is it an accent?
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Missing words, is it an accent?
Saturday morning, I sat my front steps to wait for Mr. Crumley.
This way above your pay grade.
Am I looking at mistakes or is it a regional accent?
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It should say, "On Saturday morning..." and "This is way..." Not regional in the written word, and very slangish in the oral word.Helen_Combe wrote: ↑13 Aug 2018, 12:58 Saturday morning, I sat my front steps to wait for Mr. Crumley.
This way above your pay grade.
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Out of context it would appear to be an error, but perhaps it isn't. One must take into consideration the persona of the character who is making the statement; for instance, you wouldn't hear a Shakespearian character saying, "Youz guys is driv'n me crazy." but it would sound entirely appropriate if spoken by a member of the Mafia family in the TV series, The Sopranos. Your example is obviously being narrated in first person which means we are dealing with a specific person in the story. If this person speaks this way (clipped expressions) throughout the story then I would not consider it an error, but rather continuity within the character's developed persona.
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But if it’s a regional thing, then everybody will talk in that manner.
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I cannot in any way defend the second example. The word "is" is definitely missing. There is no American accent or regional expression which validates this phrasing. This is an example of very poor editing. In fact, it should have been corrected long before it got to an editor by the writer proofing the text him/herself.Helen_Combe wrote: ↑15 Aug 2018, 04:33 Thank you. I was wondering if it’s in fact the accent of the author. ‘I sat my front steps’ (missing the on) was from the first person narrator but ‘This way above’ (missing the is) was dialogue from a different character.
But if it’s a regional thing, then everybody will talk in that manner.
And I missed the point of the first example - the "on" is missing too. Unforgivable sloth on the part of the writer. Don't people like this even read over what they have written? I try to do that even with my posts here at OBC.
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Thank you, I’m getting my red pen out right now.DATo wrote: ↑15 Aug 2018, 05:25I cannot in any way defend the second example. The word "is" is definitely missing. There is no American accent or regional expression which validates this phrasing. This is an example of very poor editing. In fact, it should have been corrected long before it got to an editor by the writer proofing the text him/herself.Helen_Combe wrote: ↑15 Aug 2018, 04:33 Thank you. I was wondering if it’s in fact the accent of the author. ‘I sat my front steps’ (missing the on) was from the first person narrator but ‘This way above’ (missing the is) was dialogue from a different character.
But if it’s a regional thing, then everybody will talk in that manner.
And I missed the point of the first example - the "on" is missing too. Unforgivable sloth on the part of the writer. Don't people like this even read over what they have written? I try to do that even with my posts here at OBC.
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Thank you, I think the jury have returned with a verdict of ‘guilty’.
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Thank youkaymontacell wrote: ↑23 Aug 2018, 13:34 Looks like just some really bad mistakes. Everyone's been there, but yeah, this isn't an accent thing.