Grammar Vs Checked
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Grammar Vs Checked
1. is a memoir by Tina Dreffin about her adventure with her husband, Peter, and their two sons, Adam and Warren, by sail across the ocean.
Correction: is a memoir by Tina Dreffin about her adventure with her husband, Peter, and their two sons, Adam and Warren, by [a]sail across the ocean.
*Note: what I mean by 'Sail' in this write up is 'Ship' or 'boat'. I think that putting 'a' or not is a matter of choice, not necessarily a grammatical error.
2. Later in the journey, Adam and Warren's friends, Sam and Gary, who are also brothers, joined them on the adventure.
Correction: Later in the journey, Adam and Warren's friends, Sam and Gary, who are also brothers, [join] them on the adventure.
*Firstly, this does not even sound correct to me, even if I have to replace that I will probably use 'joins' instead of 'join'. Secondly, this is a real life adventure with real people, and those two are actually brothers, and that doesn't change after the trip. So I don't really see anything wrong with using 'joined' in the sentence.
3. The adventure also brought them up close to various sea and land wildlife on many occasions.
Correction: The adventure also brought them up close to [the] various sea and land wildlife on many occasions.
* The last time I checked, 'the' is some kind of definite article which will only mean that I am implying that Tina and her family saw all the wildlife in the sea and on land, of which they didn't, though they saw a lot of them, but not all.
Sorry for bugging you will these, but please, I really need help in settling this.
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In #1, you are correct. Since you meant a mode of travel, the article is not needed. This link supports your position. https://learningenglish.voanews.com/a/i ... 21417.html
In #2, I do not see anything wrong with using joined. It agrees in tense with the rest of the sentence. If you have been sharing all other events in the past, even with the phrase later in the journey, everything is still happening in the past. The nonessential element who are brothers is in present tense, but that does not affect the rest of the sentence. As you pointed out, they will always be brothers; that does not affect when things happened on the trip.
(BTW, the correct present tense form would be join because it agrees with the plural noun friends.)
In #3, the article the is not required because wildlife is an uncountable noun and you were not referring to specific wildlife. Here is an excellent reference on countable and uncountable nouns: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writ ... tives.html
I hope this has been helpful.
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@MsH2k Yes, you are very correct. I was very upset when I was writing this. Thanks for pointing that out for me.