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Question about a comma

Posted: 10 Jun 2021, 13:14
by Raluca_Mihaila
Hello,
Please help me with an opinion regarding the comma used in the phrase below:

"Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were the only friends I had made in basic training, who I know were already out in the jungle."

I think that it does not serve any purpose for being there. What do you think?
Thank you

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 10 Jun 2021, 14:13
by MrsCatInTheHat
I would probably consider that a stylistic choice, being used as emphasis.

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 10 Jun 2021, 16:54
by Raluca_Mihaila
MrsCatInTheHat wrote: 10 Jun 2021, 14:13 I would probably consider that a stylistic choice, being used as emphasis.
Thank you, then I will ignore it.

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 10 Jun 2021, 20:03
by Sandy Armstrong
Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were already out in the jungle and the only friends I made since basic training. (?) Does that work?

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 10 Jun 2021, 23:43
by Juliet+1
Another alternative --
Already out in the jungle, Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were the only friends I had made in basic training.
OR
The only friends I had made in basic training, Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were already out in the jungle.

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 11 Jun 2021, 03:27
by Raluca_Mihaila
Juliet+1 wrote: 10 Jun 2021, 23:43 Another alternative --
Already out in the jungle, Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were the only friends I had made in basic training.
OR
The only friends I had made in basic training, Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were already out in the jungle.
Sandy Armstrong wrote: 10 Jun 2021, 20:03 Dan Bownds and Tom Lensing were already out in the jungle and the only friends I made since basic training. (?) Does that work?
Thank you for your suggestions!
I didn't write the phrase; I found it in the book that I am currently reading, and I was conflicted about counting another error or not.

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 11 Jun 2021, 09:41
by Bigwig1973
I agree with MrsCatInTheHat that it is stylistic and used for emphasis. The term "jungle" in the English language has many meanings. I'm not sure what the author means as I would need to see more of the text to determine his (or her, although that is unlikely) intentions. His friends may be literally in the jungle or it could be figurative, as in his friends grew up in a place that was so traumatizing to grow up in that they already had PTSD. If someone grows up in a war-torn country surrounded by violence, it could be said that they grew up in the jungle and consequently, will likely display symptoms of PTSD. Assuming that you are not from the U.S., this is probably because there were a large number of Vietnam veterans who were diagnosed with PTSD after the Vietnam War. There are other possible interpretations of the word jungle. As you used the phrase "basic training" , I provided a possible military and psychological interpretation. Now I'm curious!

Re: Question about a comma

Posted: 11 Jun 2021, 17:09
by Raluca_Mihaila
Bigwig1973 wrote: 11 Jun 2021, 09:41 I agree with MrsCatInTheHat that it is stylistic and used for emphasis. The term "jungle" in the English language has many meanings. I'm not sure what the author means as I would need to see more of the text to determine his (or her, although that is unlikely) intentions. His friends may be literally in the jungle or it could be figurative, as in his friends grew up in a place that was so traumatizing to grow up in that they already had PTSD. If someone grows up in a war-torn country surrounded by violence, it could be said that they grew up in the jungle and consequently, will likely display symptoms of PTSD. Assuming that you are not from the U.S., this is probably because there were a large number of Vietnam veterans who were diagnosed with PTSD after the Vietnam War. There are other possible interpretations of the word jungle. As you used the phrase "basic training" , I provided a possible military and psychological interpretation. Now I'm curious!
The characters were actually in the jungle, where they were fighting in the Vietnam War. So everything was literal :).
However, I do appreciate your observations and nuances, as I was not aware there were so many possible meanings.
Thank you for your feedback!