- 1. Here is the first suggested change.
By doing this, Hughes says they can fall in love with their life(lives) and the world through both the highs and lows that are(of) the rollercoaster human experience.
His book seeks to show the reader how to uncover their true self(selves) and achieve spiritual freedom,
This sentence in my review precedes the first sentence shown above where it was suggested that I change "life" to "lives": It seeks to persuade the reader how to discover their “true self” and view it in a healthy way.
If I change "life" to "lives," isn't there a disagreement between "reader" and "lives"? Since "reader" is singular, shouldn't I use "life" instead of "lives"? Or am I missing or misunderstanding something? And wouldn't the same be true if I changes "self" to "selves" in the last instance?
And regarding adding "of" to the first sentence, that one just sounds awkward to me. I could maybe see adding "part of," but my intention was to say that highs and lows = the human experience. "Rollercoaster" is an adjective that was meant to reflect "highs and lows."
2. The next comment was that I didn't indicate likes and dislikes. I thought that the following sentences communicated my likes and dislikes. Do I need to state it differently or use the words "like" and "dislike"?
Because I’m always a bit leery of philosophy books, I was a bit hesitant about reading In It Together, but I found its concepts and message pretty accessible. Sections in which the terminology and ideas were a little complicated for me to understand were followed by examples that illustrated the point. These examples were clear and kept me from getting lost. A difficult-to-grasp section, once clarified with examples, was always followed by sections I found very enjoyable.
Hughes was repetitive with certain words or examples throughout the book. If I had a dollar for every time he used the word “inexorably,” I’d be rich. The repetition, although sometimes bothersome, could be intentional, however, as it may help some readers more fully understand Hughes’ message. I admit that it did help me connect certain ideas.
Thanks so much for any insights you can provide!