Which way would you write this sentence?

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Which way would you write this sentence?

Post by Kro92813 » 09 Aug 2019, 07:58

Which way would you write this sentence? Which is grammatically correct?

1.) This was not the first encounter John had found himself in with members connected to the mob – and it certainly would not be his last.

2.) This was not the first encounter John had found himself in, with members connected to the mob, and it certainly would not be his last.

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Post by CatInTheHat » 09 Aug 2019, 08:40

Both are acceptable.
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Post by bespectacledpetal » 09 Aug 2019, 09:18

I'd normally use the 2nd one but I believe both are acceptable
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Post by michaelasunomeh » 09 Aug 2019, 10:05

i do go with the secoond one

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Post by Juliet+1 » 11 Aug 2019, 20:18

I see I'm in the minority, but I would go with the first sentence. The phrase "with members connected to the mob" qualifies "encounter" and thus does not need to be set off by commas. It could be placed right after "encounter" too.

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Post by LindsayC11 » 12 Aug 2019, 07:22

I believe both are acceptable as well. I do like the first one better though.

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Post by MorganDenton » 12 Aug 2019, 12:57

The first sentence would be the best option. The comma provides an unnecessary break in the statement.

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Post by Trill98 » 12 Aug 2019, 15:06

The second one is most acceptable.

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Post by Viharika » 19 Aug 2019, 09:23

I prefer the first sentence

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Post by Nickolas Farmakis » 08 Nov 2019, 15:14

Intuitively, I would use the second sentence, but I think that both are equally correct grammatically.

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