Which way would you write this sentence?

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Which way would you write this sentence?

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Which way would you write this sentence? Which is grammatically correct?

1.) This was not the first encounter John had found himself in with members connected to the mob – and it certainly would not be his last.

2.) This was not the first encounter John had found himself in, with members connected to the mob, and it certainly would not be his last.

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Both are acceptable.
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Post by bespectacledpetal »

I'd normally use the 2nd one but I believe both are acceptable
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Post by michaelasunomeh »

i do go with the secoond one

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Post by Juliet+1 »

I see I'm in the minority, but I would go with the first sentence. The phrase "with members connected to the mob" qualifies "encounter" and thus does not need to be set off by commas. It could be placed right after "encounter" too.

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Post by LindsayC11 »

I believe both are acceptable as well. I do like the first one better though.

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Post by MorganDenton »

The first sentence would be the best option. The comma provides an unnecessary break in the statement.

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Post by Trill98 »

The second one is most acceptable.

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Post by Viharika »

I prefer the first sentence

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Post by Nickolas Farmakis »

Intuitively, I would use the second sentence, but I think that both are equally correct grammatically.

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Post by pawahida »

i normally use 1) but personally, i think both are acceptable

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Post by grace11cephas »

I guess the first sentence is grammatically correct compared to the second.

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Post by SallyH55 »

What about rewriting it for clarity?

This was not John's first encounter with the mob – and it certainly would not be his last.

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Post by Nidhi-Kalia003 »

I think second one is acceptable.

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Post by Crissy2019 »

Number 2

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