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Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 07 Jan 2019, 05:23
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se
How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;
How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 07 Jan 2019, 09:21
by Sulemana Awal
Amazing
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 08 Jan 2019, 01:31
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 08 Jan 2019, 13:10
by Backpackroses
Oh I like this!
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 08 Jan 2019, 18:20
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Thanks for commenting. This is just a simple rhyming exercise done years ago.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 09 Jan 2019, 17:14
by Chrystal Oaks
Peaceful.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 10 Jan 2019, 08:14
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
chroaks1 wrote: ↑09 Jan 2019, 17:14
Peaceful.
Thanks for the feedback.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 11 Jan 2019, 11:27
by Louanne Piccolo
That is beautiful! I'm not really a poetry person, but I can enjoy poems like yours which are simple but powerful. Well done!
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 14 Jan 2019, 09:08
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Louanne Piccolo wrote: ↑11 Jan 2019, 11:27
That is beautiful! I'm not really a poetry person, but I can enjoy poems like yours which are simple but powerful. Well done!
Thanks for visiting. I am for the simple things, I detest complications. lol
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 10 Jun 2020, 18:38
by Samwisekoop
I love this! The rhyming pattern is fun, but the subject is beautiful. The lines are sometimes a little hard to follow, but that is part of what makes them captivating. I love the idea of sharing the pillow's dreams and all that! Very creative and inspiring! And I just absolutely love the first line! How it shyly and hesitantly presents the idea of the whole poem drew me in! Well done!
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 10 Jun 2020, 18:39
by Samwisekoop
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: ↑07 Jan 2019, 05:23
Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se
How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;
How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
Forgot.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 27 Jun 2020, 06:43
by Angul Sonti
so good. its like a desire to be able to be together and therefore such questions at the end.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 02 Jul 2020, 19:04
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Angul Sonti wrote: ↑27 Jun 2020, 06:43
so good. its like a desire to be able to be together and therefore such questions at the end.
Do you think there is a need for the question? Thanks for passing by.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 13 Jul 2020, 20:23
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Samwisekoop wrote: ↑10 Jun 2020, 18:39
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: ↑07 Jan 2019, 05:23
Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se
How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;
How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
Forgot.
Haha, I like your comment -- forgot. This happens to me sometimes. I pressed the "Submit" button without first completing what I intended to write. Stay safe.
Re: Dream On My Pillow
Posted: 03 Aug 2020, 21:08
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
Samwisekoop wrote: ↑10 Jun 2020, 18:38
I love this! The rhyming pattern is fun, but the subject is beautiful. The lines are sometimes a little hard to follow, but that is part of what makes them captivating. I love the idea of sharing the pillow's dreams and all that! Very creative and inspiring! And I just absolutely love the first line! How it shyly and hesitantly presents the idea of the whole poem drew me in! Well done!
This is meant to be humorous. Thank you for your generous views.