I turn towards the.......... By Jewelz

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I turn towards the.......... By Jewelz

Post by Jewelz19 » 02 Nov 2018, 07:04

Heartache
Heart break
Lonely days
Sleepless nights
I know not what I did
I know not what I do
In this tunnel of my life
There is but two ways
One is dark
The other is light
I must choose a way
To turn towards the dark
All my pain will end
To turn towards the light
All my pain will just begin
I know not where to turn
I know not where to begin
I know not where it will end
I turn towards the..........

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Post by sarahmarlowe » 12 Nov 2018, 13:00

There is a lot of power in these few words. As someone who lost a friend to suicide, I can say that your poem stirs up emotions and creates a heavy emotional mood.

I like your repetitive use of "I know not." That is the bottom line, isn't it?
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