What I am Not Saying

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Daniel-book
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What I am Not Saying

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I am not saying I do not like you the way you are,
I am just saying if your breasts were a little bigger,
The nipples in particular,
Then I would be more eager.

I am not saying you are untidy,
I am just saying if you could clean the house more often,
Then it is highly unlikely,
The infections will toughen.

I am not saying you are a spendthrift,
I am just saying you can shop better with a written budget,
I hope you get the drift,
From my small nugget.

I am not saying you have a loud mouth,
I am just saying if you could reduce the gossip,
Then we would witness more growth,
In our relationship.

I am not saying you need to befriend Colgate,
I am just saying a little fresh breath,
Is like a magnet,
Its attraction goes a long length.

I am not saying you are plump,
I am just saying exercise is good for your body,
Unless you are dump,
Eating is not a felony.
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call_me_bless
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Post by call_me_bless »

I like the simplicity and yet the direct message of this poem as it points out the truths that people are unwilling to speak out to those they know, particularly those close to them
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Post by Billy Bookmark »

Yep I see why it's what I'm not saying. Saying it would probably get me killed and I'm sure the opposite party has things not said but there are those rare few who are outspoken enough to give voice to whatever. Nice poem.
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Post by Areej Tahir »

woah, this is a good one
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Post by Tobewankenobe »

This is such a good example of this. When what you want to say will get you kicked, but it's pretty important to express all these thoughts to your partner in some way.
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Post by Aliciaroseperry1992 »

This one I am borderline obsessed with... the ending could change in my opinion- seems more simplistically written compared to the rest.
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

This is good, but no advertisement, please. I guess you got your inspiration from the song of Ronan Keating's "When You Say Nothing at All."
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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