Restless Nights

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thisgirl818
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Restless Nights

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A hundred thousand sleepless nights
I only wish that you're here beside me
My bloodshot eyes begging to sleep
My body aching for the slumber I was deprived
However long was the last time I rested?
Maybe it was before you started leaving
I lost something when you left so sudden
I long for you, trying to piece out something
Anything that could bring me back to myself
How can love scare you to death?
Strong enough to leave and maybe never return.
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Post by palilogy »

I can tell there is strong emotion here.
But nothing new is being said
I have seen these cliches before.
Consider diving deeper - use specifics.
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