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Emily Paul
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Post by Emily Paul » 20 Aug 2018, 18:47

I slept weeping for my happiness light seemed to be fading.
The dawn came and stil it was getting darker, the sky with no stars and moon.
But he called and told me to smile but his eyes were burning red.
He came, He came the voices in my head screamed.

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Post by palilogy » 23 Aug 2018, 10:30

The end of the poem is really strong here.

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Post by Floxxy01 » 11 Sep 2018, 20:06

Precise and heart touching. Am impressed

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