Breaking romantic laws

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Daniel-book
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Breaking romantic laws

Post by Daniel-book » 17 Aug 2018, 10:51

I don’t want to go to an exotic restaurant,
To eat French salad,
Or go to a music concert,
To listen to love ballad.

I do not want to go out in the cold,
To watch stars and the moon,
Or to prove that I am bold,
By riding on a hot air balloon.

I do not want to go to the park,
To look at a white rhino,
Or try my luck,
Gambling in a members-only Casino.

I do not want to go to the beach,
I see no beauty in a blue sea,
And salt-rich crab fish,
Is not even close to my fantasy.

All I want is to spend time with you indoor,
My head on your chest,
Not caring about any romantic law,
Not caring about the rest.

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Post by palilogy » 23 Aug 2018, 10:34

indoor should be indoors
overall the passion seems under the surface
a few of the rhymes and lines are a bit too cliche
consider speaking out from the rhymes

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