A Feline's Schedule
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A Feline's Schedule
Wake up servants
Demand food
Eat food
Sleep
Sleep
Sleep
Go on daily hunt
Hunt
sh*t
Sleep
Sleep
Sleep
Grace servants with appearance
Play
Punish servants, claw, nip, hiss
Demand food
Eat food
Sleep
Sleep
Sleep.
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i would remove the title or allude to the fact that it is a feline without directly saying so
creates intrigue
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Thank you, I didn't think too much about the title and the overall impact it could have on the poem but I see your point about creating the intrigue
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I like the repetition of "Sleep." That's what they love to do! I think it's perfectly fine the way you've written it. The only suggestion I have IF you want to revise is to get a little rhythm going with the verse.
Thank you so much for posting this for all the world to see! Keep writing!
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