A Feline's Schedule

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A Feline's Schedule

Post by Emi_Review » 17 Aug 2018, 08:25

Wake at 3am
Wake up servants
Demand food
Eat food
Sleep
Sleep
Sleep
Go on daily hunt
Hunt
sh*t
Sleep
Sleep
Sleep
Grace servants with appearance
Play
Punish servants, claw, nip, hiss
Demand food
Eat food
Sleep
Sleep
Sleep.

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Post by palilogy » 23 Aug 2018, 10:35

laughing at the sh*t line
i would remove the title or allude to the fact that it is a feline without directly saying so
creates intrigue

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Post by Emi_Review » 25 Aug 2018, 16:58

palilogy wrote:
23 Aug 2018, 10:35
laughing at the sh*t line
i would remove the title or allude to the fact that it is a feline without directly saying so
creates intrigue
Thank you, I didn't think too much about the title and the overall impact it could have on the poem but I see your point about creating the intrigue :D

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