Wherever You Are

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thisgirl818
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Wherever You Are

Post by thisgirl818 » 28 Jul 2018, 04:39

Baby don't cry
It's okay, you'll be okay
I don't know where you are
But I know you're safe

You must be
I really hope you are
Live a life without me
Someday you'll understand

I had to
Because I love you
So much, I had to save you
You deserve the world child

I'm so sorry
I guess you'll never know
I gave birth to you
And I did it alone

I was alone
Young, foolish and in love
Then you came along child
You made a mother in me

I tried
I know I couldn't keep you
You're better off not knowing
I gave up everything to have you

I love you
So baby don't cry
Wherever you are be happy
It's okay, you'll be okay

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Post by LASERRR__371 » 28 Jul 2018, 13:08

Sweet and heart melting.

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Post by palilogy » 30 Jul 2018, 09:46

Strong theme, message and tone....but it's not very original.
I have seen these lines before - I want something more.

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Post by xian20 » 30 Jul 2018, 10:08

I like the the way it is presented and how it visualize the theme.

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