Never Say Just

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Daniel-book
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Never Say Just

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“I love you just the way you are.”
No, you do not,
If you really love me then say you love me the way I am,
Do not say you love me just the way I am,
Do not say just,
It makes me feel you are sympathizing with me,
Sympathizing with my flaws,
Do not sympathize with my flaws,
Embrace my flaws.

Say you love me the way I am,
Do not say you love me just the way I am,
It makes me feel as if you are doing me a favour,
Rescuing me from shame,
Makes me feel as if you have better options,
Make me your better option,
Not just a thing,
A second fiddle,
Never say Just.

Love me the way I am,
Do not love me just the way I am,
Never say just,
As if you mean just a love,
Just a joke,
Just an affair,
Just a woman.

“We are just having sex,”
“We are just friends”
How does that sound?
Just is not the real thing,
Like, just an example,
Am I an example of a lover?
Never say just,
Because I am not just a person in your life,
I am more than just,
I am real.
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Post by amapat+33 »

I love it and also think using just is not good since it sounds like a second fiddle thing. Thank you
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Post by LASERRR__371 »

Love the point in your poem in total agreement.
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Hmm I can tell there is a strong tone and voice here.
But - nothing new is being said.
Every line here I have read before.
Stay away from cliche lines and use examples and specifics - draw in from reality.
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Post by Cassandra Keeney »

I like the voice of this poem, it is strong. The feelings of the poem are one that many can relate to as well. I loved the poem.
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Post by Doug Jones »

I'm now reluctant to ever use the word 'just' ever again, so mission accomplished. This is very good, Daniel. Bravo.
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Post by Daniel-book »

Thank you all for your comments
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Post by 21Summber27 »

Funny but true, you are a writer and not just a writer . It reminds of someone else. You may say that I may be rude however lines were simple but it gives meaning. Good one!
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