The Speech

[Jennifer Fernandez]

“Even after sixty-six hours
Of my rambling and whining
And my tremors of angry words,
Your resolute mind ignores my speech
And I lay empty inside your darkness.
You decide to ignore me
Yet I do not know why.
If I suffer, you suffer.
If I burn inside with my juices
That claim something to dissolve,
You burn also for we are one.
But, even after all of that,
You decide to suffer and take me with you.
The juices gnaw my inside walls
And I cry, and I cry, and I cry.
But you just hear me rumble
And ignore yourself as you ignore me.”
With such unheard words
Ended the desperate speech.

[palilogy]

Strong tone behind this poem I would consider condensing removing the cliche lines and repetition of crying

[Jennifer Fernandez]

Strong tone behind this poem I would consider condensing removing the cliche lines and repetition of crying

Thank you for your advice! You are right.