Insecure

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ccranston
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Insecure

Post by ccranston » 21 Jul 2018, 03:55

"Why are you so insecure?"
"Why are you so insecure?"

You asked me this question over and over.
"Why are you so insecure?"

Insecure. Insecure. Insecure.
That word runs through my mind a million times.

I can almost feel the word bursting from my head and attaching itself to me. A brand engraved by you.

Insecurity is a side effect you see.
So with tears running down my face, here's my question to you.

Dear dad, why do you make me feel so insecure?

Should I ask you again?
“You know you’ve read a good book when you turn the last page and feel a little as if you have lost a friend." –Paul Sweeney

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Post by palilogy » 23 Jul 2018, 15:02

Hmmmm perhaps too much repetition in this poem..

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Post by ccranston » 23 Jul 2018, 15:22

I've been waiting on your critiques lol. I've noticed you're very honest, thank you. I'll keep working on this one.
“You know you’ve read a good book when you turn the last page and feel a little as if you have lost a friend." –Paul Sweeney

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