A Daughter's Cry

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A Daughter's Cry

Post by ccranston » 21 Jul 2018, 03:00

Look in my eyes and you will clearly see how much I need you to take care of me.

Hold my hand and you will surely feel how much I need you to guide me still.

Listen to me and I promise you'll hear the little girl in me reaching for her daddy in fear.

I don't want to be bitter, but I've waiting so long for you to just notice me and be the father I've needed you to be.

I'm not insecure and I know we always disagree, but why is it so hard for you to just love me?
“You know you’ve read a good book when you turn the last page and feel a little as if you have lost a friend." –Paul Sweeney

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Post by KatSims92 » 22 Jul 2018, 17:32

I can really feel the longing and sadness in this poem. Good job. I appreciate your courage.

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Post by ccranston » 22 Jul 2018, 17:54

KatSims92 wrote:
22 Jul 2018, 17:32
I can really feel the longing and sadness in this poem. Good job. I appreciate your courage.
Thank you! It was a tough one to write.
“You know you’ve read a good book when you turn the last page and feel a little as if you have lost a friend." –Paul Sweeney

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Post by Ms Maina » 23 Jul 2018, 10:59

I like it, connected emotionally to you as I read it. Nice work

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Post by palilogy » 23 Jul 2018, 15:00

I love it, but I wish it was longer.
I want to know more about this relationship and the father.

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Post by ccranston » 23 Jul 2018, 15:19

Ms Maina wrote:
23 Jul 2018, 10:59
I like it, connected emotionally to you as I read it. Nice work
Thank you! I'm glad you could feel the emotion.
“You know you’ve read a good book when you turn the last page and feel a little as if you have lost a friend." –Paul Sweeney

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Post by ccranston » 23 Jul 2018, 15:20

palilogy wrote:
23 Jul 2018, 15:00
I love it, but I wish it was longer.
I want to know more about this relationship and the father.
Thanks so much! I'll work on it more.
“You know you’ve read a good book when you turn the last page and feel a little as if you have lost a friend." –Paul Sweeney

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