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We used to be everything we want
But not anymore, nope, nada
We used to have those long walks
Now it's just a short trip to the subway
Nothing left but "I'm too tired" goodbyes
We used to be like two-way mirrors
Seeing our bare selves through the days
How did it turn into selfish rear-views?
We used to say it truthfully
"I love you till infinity and beyond"
But I don't think you mean it anymore
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Use the material and real raw emotions - examples. Put more words and life into this poem.
Otherwise it's only a cliche' that reveals nothing new to the reader.