The Wake

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The Wake

Post by thisgirl818 » 06 Jul 2018, 04:11

I sit here
Leaning on my ink-covered walls
Words I wrote so long ago
Secrets expressed in black ink
A blue blanket wrapped around me
I've been sleeping on you side of the bed again
Your scent mixed with my tears on the pillow
The sheets unwashed since that day
When I woke up and you're no longer breathing

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Post by palilogy » 06 Jul 2018, 19:18

"That longer breathing"
--dig deeper into the small moments within the poem and give them strength

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