A Poem for Her

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A Poem for Her

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A poem for her

Her eyes are the glimmering colour of emerald green

That colour of the forest after it rains

The hope they shower no matter what has happened, is real

Leaving you with the feeling it brings

They are just like exquisite priceless emerald

When you look into them you feel weak to the bones

Maybe you should stop staring and instead, give her a hand

She is laying on the floor, hurt, and you are busy feeding your hormones
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beautiful. its basically reads my mind on how i feel in my life!
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"She is laying on the floor, hurt, and you are busy feeding your hormones"

I think there is an entire poem - hiding in this one line. Wanting to be pulled out.
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Melamom97- wrote: ↑02 Jul 2018, 21:00 beautiful. its basically reads my mind on how i feel in my life!
Thanks Melamom. Many of us can relate.
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palilogy wrote: ↑02 Jul 2018, 21:30 "She is laying on the floor, hurt, and you are busy feeding your hormones"

I think there is an entire poem - hiding in this one line. Wanting to be pulled out.
You think? Maybe you could help.😊
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wow really nice
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Leaving you with the feeling it brings

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