Torn
- SereneCharles
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Torn
But he’d always make me
He held a position so high
I wanted to keep him there
So I’d let him do it to me
Not that I didn’t enjoy it
But I felt dirty afterwards
Because I knew it was wrong
He was a paedophile
And I, his victim
I’m grown up now
But the memory still haunts
I never told anyone
And I probably never will
He’s attained a higher position
Respected and loved by all
But here I am
Broken and hurt
I write about it everyday
But then delete it soon too
After all, who would be happy to read
something like this
But this time I’m going to leave the writing
I’ll toss it out on the streets and hope someone
good finds it
And tell everyone my story
Even though I’d be anonymous
- palilogy
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I love your use of line spacing "I'll toss it out on the streets and hope someone / good finds it"
I think you have a strong voice and narrator here =)
I would just consider the ending - it doesn't seem as strong as the rest of the poem.
- SereneCharles
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I was thinking the same thing too. Thanks for pointing that out.
- SereneCharles
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I was thinking the same thing too. Thanks for pointing that out.