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littlejoan
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A head without a head
It sounds ironic🤔...
I'd love to head
I'd love to be the head
But I have no head

A young dream shuttered
All in the name of being the head
I went to the pastors...to the counsellors..
Remember,all these are heads,they taught on how to head
How to be the head,but I had no head.

Although I have no head I head my non-existant head.
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Post by palilogy »

I'm not sure about the pastors in the poem...
I also feel the poem could be stronger if you narrowed it down and only kept the best of the lines.
Seems to be too much repetition.
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