- Ayesha Shoaib
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and kiss the sweet misery; your soft petaled soul,
that hides mysteriously
in your face.
Summer waits for me in the backyard, with daisies in her hair,
and roses in her cheeks.
and this time
with strings of new beginnings in my heart--
I abandon to smell all your winter roses,
I set you free,
I forget the past,
I let you go.
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Consider which lines are your strength and writing no line weaker then the one that came before it.
Example I love that line but then the last three lines of the poem fall flat. They are not as strong and don't speak or say something new to the poem. Enhance the poem. Think on your greatest lines.