Read me on a rainy day
- Aspiring_Anna
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Read me on a rainy day
Read me when the skies turn grey.
Read me when you're left astray.
Read me on a rainy day.
Read me when your feelings are hurt.
Read me when there's puddles in the dirt.
Read me when all you've got is your torn up skirt.
Read me when your feelings are hurt.
Read me when you're feeling rather low.
Read me when you've got nowhere to go.
Read me when you're crying in your beaten pillow.
Read me when you're feeling rather low.
Read me when you've lost all hope.
Read me when you've exhausted all ways to cope.
Read me when you're frustrated,and knotting up the rope.
Read me when you've lost all hope.
Read me when it begins to rain.
Read me when you can't take the pain.
Read me when you can't abstain.
Read me when it begins to rain.
Read me on a rainy day.
- Ayesha Shoaib
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- palilogy
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I love the idea - an opportunity would be condensing the poem.
Consider keeping only the strongest lines - for a greater impact.
- KatSims92
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I love the comforting nature of the poem, mixed in with the devastating thoughts like "knotting up the rope." Keep up the good work!