I Have Something to Say

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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I Have Something to Say

Post by liftedbooks » 01 Jun 2018, 10:58

I have something to say
It might not be relevant to you
Or to him
Or to her
But I have something to say
The words might not affect you
They might not touch you
Or change you
But I have something to say
These are my words
My thoughts
My ideas
I won’t keep quiet
What I have to say
Might not concern you
But that’s okay
Because it’s not about you
Now
Let me say what I want to

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Post by frank banks » 14 Jun 2018, 07:27

Its good and creative because it has emotions attached to it.

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Post by palilogy » 15 Jun 2018, 16:19

I wonder how the poem would sound if you got rid of the word you
Think about it - play around with the form and ideas =)
I think you have something there.

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Post by American-Alvin » 17 Jun 2018, 04:12

First two lines of first stanza creates the reading atmosphre

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