Sonnet 2000

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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Sonnet 2000

Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 31 May 2018, 01:36

My wits beclouded, being spammed by grief,
With hopes deleted, I no longer dreamed,
As sorrow hacked my joys, then fled like thief,
And made me browse for smiles, that you once beamed:
As loneliness encrypts, my heart would hang,
Much malware now, my memory has stashed,
Farewell to files, to songs that I once sang,
For deep within, I felt my soul has crashed:
Might I reboot, to better times restore,
And once again, upload the life we shared,
When world freeze/frame, right after and before,
Thereby, between, our lasting love we bared:
.....Restart my life, reload the memories,
.....But edit out the cares, much bytes it frees.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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Post by thaservices1 » 02 Jun 2018, 03:48

I like it!
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- Roosevelt

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 02 Jun 2018, 07:55

thaservices1 wrote:
02 Jun 2018, 03:48
I like it!
Thanks. It means a lot to me.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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Post by thaservices1 » 02 Jun 2018, 08:02

The Eve poem is my favorite of yours so far but this one is neat with computer parallels.
"Much malware now, my memory has stashed, "
Great line.
"It is not the critic that counts..."
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes » 02 Jun 2018, 08:09

thaservices1 wrote:
02 Jun 2018, 08:02
The Eve poem is my favorite of yours so far but this one is neat with computer parallels.
"Much malware now, my memory has stashed, "
Great line.
Just trying to bring Shakespeare up-to-date. lol.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"

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