The Fall

[OneMolapisi14]

I stumbled over myself
Trying to get up I stumbled again.

How do you let go of yourself and still keep yourself?
Perhaps the you that you think is you is not you
Maybe you define yourself
And still fail to know you.

I stumbled,
But this time I did not get up
I lay there
I gave up
I swam in the me I did not want to be
I said, I swam in it
In all my tears, in all my agony
In all my grief
I swam in the me I did not want to be.

Tears filled my eyes and I blinked them away
Did I really deserve to cry?
To feel pain?
To feel like I stumbled?
Like I stumbled and fell?
Because how many times had I done this?
How many times had I been here?

I fell...
I did not cry
I did not cry for help
I simply lay there
In the pool of the me I did not want to be
And I enjoyed it.

[thaservices1]

Very nice.

[palilogy]

The last line - amazing ending.
Strong poem - I would consider removing some of the repetition and questions.
Condensing the poem could lead to a greater lasting impact.
Consider your best lines and raise the rest to reach that.

[KatSims92]

This is a really great poem and it delves deep into deep questions about the self. It even made me self-reflect a bit. Good, strong writing!