Poetry:My Five Senses
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Poetry:My Five Senses
POETRY : MY FIVE SENSES
The aroma of my words
What you perceive
When I speak
Sight of my letters
My works of art
What gladdens your heart
The most melodious song
One loves to hear
Never hurts the ear
Not even with the semblance of food
Yet it sumptuous taste on the tongue of the one who recites
Feels the stomach of our thoughts all night
And rejuvenates our mood
Armless,
It touches my soul and being
Revives my five senses
Only poetry is of such great appeal
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I'm happy you loved it! Although its only true when you actually understand the persona. Once you don't understand the persona, it can be really frustrating. By the way, do you write poems?
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'The aroma of my words', what a great line.
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Well its not like I write very good too but practice, a lot of reading and seeking constructive criticism helps too. A reason why platforms like this can help you get different opinions about what you've written.
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Thanks for the comment and the correction!thaservices1 wrote: ↑02 Jun 2018, 04:25 'Yet its' on line 11.
'The aroma of my words', what a great line.
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On line eleven, it is supposed to be ''Yet its* sumptuous taste on the tongue of the one who recite''biscuits wrote: ↑10 May 2018, 17:35 Please help with feedback on this piece. I wrote it about 2 months ago
POETRY : MY FIVE SENSES
The aroma of my words
What you perceive
When I speak
Sight of my letters
My works of art
What gladdens your heart
The most melodious song
One loves to hear
Never hurts the ear
Not even with the semblance of food
Yet it sumptuous taste on the tongue of the one who recites
Feels the stomach of our thoughts all night
And rejuvenates our mood
Armless,
It touches my soul and being
Revives my five senses
Only poetry is of such great appeal
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Thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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"What you perceive
When I speak"
I do think you should look into omitting repetition - too many my and our.