Chaos

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Keamberlite
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I see you in my dreams where we dance under the light of the moon
Where we hold hands and tell tales of just me and you
I recite the captivating words to say to you
I practice the emotions to give away
I rehearse scenes of leaning in to plant that kiss on you
But just as I bump into you around the corner
And you flash that soul capturing smile
My thoughts jolts into commotion
My mind screams but my lips stutter inaudibly
My heart races and skids with exciting panic
The presence of You does something inexplicable to me
It's a kind of orderly excitement in a state of entropy
It is joyous senseless in spontaneous Chaos
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A love poem
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its actually a really nice poem about love. you really feel whats love and how you gotta go through it by reading it
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Keamberlite wrote: 06 May 2018, 03:29 I see you in my dreams where we dance under the light of the moon
Where we hold hands and tell tales of just me and you
I recite the captivating words to say to you
I practice the emotions to give away
I rehearse scenes of leaning in to plant that kiss on you
But just as I bump into you around the corner
And you flash that soul capturing smile
My thoughts jolts into commotion
My mind screams but my lips stutter inaudibly
My heart races and skids with exciting panic
The presence of You does something inexplicable to me
It's a kind of orderly excitement in a state of entropy
It is joyous senseless in spontaneous Chaos
Love causing chaos. This is really a captivating piece of poetry. You really captured my mind.
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When plans and dreams meet reality, chaos ensues. I like the twist as the you disrupts the I so without trying.
“On the highest throne in the world, we still sit only on our own bottom.”
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Keamberlite wrote: 06 May 2018, 03:29
The presence of You does something inexplicable to me
It's a kind of orderly excitement in a state of entropy
Great line!
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