Prayer of the Meek Poet

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Prayer of the Meek Poet

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My Lord, please set my heart to make amends,
Speak words of truth, not words of one deranged,
Make me so meek towards my estranged friends
Whose tongues, to scorpions' tails have so exchanged;

Let not my pen, be sharper than their swords,
My coat, make not more colorful than theirs,
Give me the wisdom modesty affords,
I'll only act for good, my heart declares;

I drank perfumes to scent the words I spoke,
And closed my eyes to purify my thoughts,
With fettered hands, to burden I did yoke,
And guide my pen to write nothing of naughts;

……My Lord, make me so light where so I pass,
…...Or let me fly, so not to tread on grass.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Short but to the point.
It's wonderful poem
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

Royal priest wrote: 03 May 2018, 10:44 Short but to the point.
It's wonderful poem
Thank you for your generous comment.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Nice piece
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Suxido wrote: 03 May 2018, 11:04Nice piece
Thank you, my friend. I am honored, this comment being the first post you made in this community. Welcome.
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...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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I love it.
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Daniel-book wrote: 04 May 2018, 14:47 I love it.
Thanks. That counts a lot to me.
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

Royal priest wrote: 03 May 2018, 10:44 Short but to the point.
It's wonderful poem
This can't be much longer, 14-line iambic pentameter is standard for Shakespearean sonnets.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

Correction please: Line #12 should read better as follows:

Please guide my pen to write nothing of naughts;


Thank you.
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Another good one. Keep the thread rolling!
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MdNickez wrote: 21 Feb 2019, 07:27 Another good one. Keep the thread rolling!

Thanks for commenting.
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What a great honour. I really appreciate it! Thanks.
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MdNickez wrote: 22 Feb 2019, 19:27 What a great honour. I really appreciate it! Thanks.
I know only poetic souls could readily understand. That said, I am happy to know my writing is understandable enough.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 03 May 2018, 09:34 My Lord, please set my heart to make amends,
Speak words of truth, not words of one deranged,
Make me so meek towards my estranged friends
Whose tongues, to scorpions' tails have so exchanged;

Let not my pen, be sharper than their swords,
My coat, make not more colorful than theirs,
Give me the wisdom modesty affords,
I'll only act for good, my heart declares;

I drank perfumes to scent the words I spoke,
And closed my eyes to purify my thoughts,
With fettered hands, to burden I did yoke,
And guide my pen to write nothing of naughts;

……My Lord, make me so light where so I pass,
…...Or let me fly, so not to tread on grass.
Great! This poem is clear and to the point! I think the second line of the first stanza is a little bumpy when read aloud. But otherwise, a very well written poem!
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

Samwisekoop wrote: 10 Jun 2020, 18:48
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 03 May 2018, 09:34 My Lord, please set my heart to make amends,
Speak words of truth, not words of one deranged,
Make me so meek towards my estranged friends
Whose tongues, to scorpions' tails have so exchanged;

Let not my pen, be sharper than their swords,
My coat, make not more colorful than theirs,
Give me the wisdom modesty affords,
I'll only act for good, my heart declares;

I drank perfumes to scent the words I spoke,
And closed my eyes to purify my thoughts,
With fettered hands, to burden I did yoke,
And guide my pen to write nothing of naughts;

……My Lord, make me so light where so I pass,
…...Or let me fly, so not to tread on grass.
Great! This poem is clear and to the point! I think the second line of the first stanza is a little bumpy when read aloud. But otherwise, a very well written poem!
Thanks for the edit.
You seem to have a point there. And a good one. So, how about this:

"To speak the truth, not words of one deranged,"
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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