Love Fails

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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Love Fails

Post by shortguytall » 21 Apr 2018, 03:49

Hope, for its warmth,
Turns to a burning pyre,
When care is accursed;
Souls burn, and lovers
Sit and wallow in ashes,
When those loving gifts,
Which are most beautiful,
Are returned, rejected.

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Post by Akosua + » 18 May 2018, 09:55

The poet could have written more. I don't like how short it is. Though some short poetry are good, this isn't enough. For example, the poet could have elaborated more on the 'burning pyre', "when care is accursed" etc.

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