LEAKING ENTRANCE

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Daniello
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LEAKING ENTRANCE

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LEAKING ENTRANCE
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Smooth mouth says straight,
Rough mouth I hate,
For it says bluff,
It says more than enough.

Bald man with rough mouth,
Why won't their land be drouth?
Oh,aperture also define tomorrow,
It either subjugate or amplify sorrow.

High-flavored man has mouth in control
Words escape not easily unless to cajole
Why won't he be in dough?
For with impermeable lips he grow.

Running mouth define level of massacre
In senselessness,mouth even become penury burdener
Some mouth despite ooze claim wise
But actually more idiotize.

To avoid paucity
To suffer not offsprings in scarcity
Mouth must be sealed with padlock
Only a way out of laughingstock!.
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

Amazing poem. You are referring here to the anatomical orifices, or specifically to the mouth, "leaking entrance" with some oozing more than enough, "aperture" and running mouth as though a leaky faucet, to be padlocked. Very colorful speech and figurative. I could see a rhyming scheme, and that is good for a poem. Thanks for sharing.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
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...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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