Losing Sleep

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Do you do your best thinking at night?

1. Yes
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2. No
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3. Most of the time, but sometimes I just crash.
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Post by 1badninja »

  • Losing Sleep :no-spoil:
Broken down
Lost in a distant sound
All the voices mash together
Distrust is a must
I'm sorry i can't see you
Im looking for a sign
That shits about to go down
As far as the eye can see
There's danger about to take me
Another worry lost in the thunder
Pouring down on me inside
As i smile working away the nights
Trying to find some meaning in this sight
From the darkness between my ears
Will you hear me?
Will you walk on by?
Why is love so hard to give away?
Will I see another day?
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Post by Amberlily »

This is a perfect example of how the mind works when you can't sleep and all you can do is think. Suddenly, everything happening to you at the time feels too real, and you wonder what will come of the following day. I really enjoyed this since I often do this myself. Thanks for sharing!
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Post by rnnfyvc28 »

This poem signifies how sexy our mind is. And even we are about to sleep we are still thinking that is why mind has greatest function in our life
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Post by Tiff08 »

This poem is definitely a true reflection of what happens in the human mind at night. Very relatable!

Thanks for sharing.
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