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"I Write"

With pin in hand, what can I write? With nothing in mind to begin to write.

With pin in hand, what can I write? With words frozen in sight...

With pin in hand, I asked myself, how can I give up the fight, before I begin to write.

With pin in hand, words begin to flow.

With pin in hand, I write not of anathemise or ambivalent with this pin.

With pin in hand, I write with this pin to stay aphonic of all!

With pin in hand, I write of beauty, spices and everything nice...

With pin in hand, I write of what no man shouldn't take for granted!

With pin in hand, I write of dulcet, svelte, zaftig and belesprit...

With pin in hand, the words are flowing through the mind that was at rest, frozen in sight.

With pin in hand, I write of the unfrozen words, that was blind to sight, now I see, how I won the fight!

With pin in hand, word's are flowing. Writing of beauty and God's gift to man.

Speaking of what came to sight! With pin in hand, I write of no man shouldn't be without!

With pin in hand, I write to thank the most beautiful creatures on earth.

With pin in hand, thank you for being so understanding and loquacious.

With pin in hand, I write I love you from the bottom of my heart and appreciate you and for all you do, Ladies! I write...

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Larry Perry, Sr.
11/10/2017

-- 26 Nov 2017, 22:07 --

For the past two weeks since I'd been writing, I will get up in the morning and write something. So I set down that morning wondering what to write and God put on my heart to write this.
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laperr2922 wrote: 26 Nov 2017, 22:04 "I Write"

With pin in hand, what can I write? With nothing in mind to begin to write.

With pin in hand, what can I write? With words frozen in sight...

With pin in hand, I asked myself, how can I give up the fight, before I begin to write.

With pin in hand, words begin to flow.

With pin in hand, I write not of anathemise or ambivalent with this pin.

With pin in hand, I write with this pin to stay aphonic of all!

With pin in hand, I write of beauty, spices and everything nice...

With pin in hand, I write of what no man shouldn't take for granted!

With pin in hand, I write of dulcet, svelte, zaftig and belesprit...

With pin in hand, the words are flowing through the mind that was at rest, frozen in sight.

With pin in hand, I write of the unfrozen words, that was blind to sight, now I see, how I won the fight!

With pin in hand, word's are flowing. Writing of beauty and God's gift to man.

Speaking of what came to sight! With pin in hand, I write of no man shouldn't be without!

With pin in hand, I write to thank the most beautiful creatures on earth.

With pin in hand, thank you for being so understanding and loquacious.

With pin in hand, I write I love you from the bottom of my heart and appreciate you and for all you do, Ladies! I write...

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Larry Perry, Sr.
11/10/2017

-- 26 Nov 2017, 22:07 --

For the past two weeks since I'd been writing, I will get up in the morning and write something. So I set down that morning wondering what to write and God put on my heart to write this.
Maybe, you meant to say "pen"? Is it really pin or pen?
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Post by Lincolnshirelass »

Still a lovely poem, though ...
An Eye for an Eye only ends up making the whole world blind.

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Lincolnshirelass wrote: 01 Dec 2017, 03:56 Still a lovely poem, though ...
I agree. Just a little proofread and this is good to go.
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Yes I did meant for it to be pen. Thanks for pointing it out.
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laperr2922 wrote: 04 Dec 2017, 19:57 Yes I did meant for it to be pen. Thanks for pointing it out.
It's my pleasure. :tiphat:
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I enjoyed the poem. I like that you wrote about the need to write.

"With pin in hand, word's are flowing. Writing of beauty and God's gift to man." That is my favorite line.
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At least you are disciplined and write something every day and that's a good habit.
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I love this! I can certainly relate. So often I attempt to write but nothing surfaces, and by some miracle, after much wrestling, a body of work is presented on my page. It's a daily struggle. I really enjoyed reading this poem.
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